Happy Valentines Day Everyone, or should I say Happy Valentiny! I’m excited for Susanna Leonard Hill’s 4th annual Valentiny writing contest. For all of the fabulous entries, or more information on Susanna’s contest, head on over here. I hope you enjoy my story. It comes in at 209 words.
The Love Letter
Susie loves Johnny,
and Johnny loves Jane,
but Jane’s one true love
is Marty McShane.
Marty McShane still thinks
girls are icky,
but everyone knows
that Marty’s so picky.
On Valentine’s Day
Susie wrote a love letter,
in hopes that her Johnny
would never forget her,
but Johnny loves Jane,
and pretended the letter
was one he had written
in order to get her
to be his true love,
his girl, his sweet Jane,
but Jane’s one true love is Marty McShane.
And Marty McShane still thinks
girls are icky,
and everyone knows that Marty’s so picky.
Love letters make Marty queasy inside,
so when Jane passed that letter,
He wanted to die!
Then the teacher said,
“Marty, please hand me your letter!”
and Marty burned red,
‘cause he knew he upset her.
Marty knew Teacher would read the love letter
out loud to the class,
there was no way he’d let her!
He crumpled the letter
He rumpled the page,
then hid the love note
in the class pet’s steel cage.
Freckles woke up
As the letter slipped in,
and he knew that the letter wasn’t for him,
but he guiltily swallowed it down with a grin.
causing classmates to laugh,
much to Marty’s chagrin!
Very cute, and you got a lot in there with 214 words! Nice job.
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Thanks so much!
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Really cute. I enjoyed reading your entry. Good luck! I love Guinea Pigs!
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Thank you! I love Guinea pigs too, they’re so cute.
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What a fun mixed-up love story! I guess, in the end, it was the guinea pig who came out the victor!
Good luck in the contest!
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Thanks Colleen. Yes the guinea pig steals the show!
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Aww! And wow, I love how you have so many characters interact with this one love letter. And I really enjoyed the surprise guinea pig ending. 🙂
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Thank you Heather! It was fun writing all the characters, but I do love the guinea pig the best.
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The story and the rhythm are both so bouncy and fun! Loved reading it!
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Thanks so much Kelly!
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Ah, what a tangled web of love we weave! 🙂 Isn’t that so tough, when love given is not reciprocated by the right one! And who was Freckles to turn down a delicious love letter even if it wasn’t for him? It WAS in his cage… 🙂 Probably a good thing he ate it so no one had to be embarrassed! Thanks for joining in the Valentiny fun, Jean!
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Thanks Susanna! I always have so much fun with Valentiny, and all of your writing contests! And I agree about Freckles there was no way he could have turned down that delicious love lettter!
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