Hello everyone it’s time for another one of Susanna Leonard Hill’s fabulous holiday writing contests. Here are the rules: Write a children’s story 350 words or less with any version of “Rocking around the Christmas tree at the Christmas Party Hop” as your opening line. The story can be poetry or prose, silly or serious or sweet, religious or not, based on Christmas, Hanukkah, Kwanzaa or whatever you celebrate.
This tune was way too catchy so I wrote my story to the music of Brenda Lee, sing along and have some Christmas Cheer!!
Sneaking a peek on Christmas Eve
at the presents under the tree.
Mom and Dad believed we were fast asleep,
but in reality…
Sneaking a peek on Christmas Eve is a dangerous game we play.
Crawling on our bellies all through the house,
in a covert Navy Seal way.
They would go completely mental knowing
we were here;
voices whispering,
“Shhh be quiet, getting caught would cause a riot.”
Sneaking a peek on Christmas Eve
like the ghosts of Christmas Past.
Checking out the gifts that Santa left,
and the piles that we amassed.
They would go completely mental knowing
we were here;
voices whispering,
“Shhh be quiet, getting caught would cause a riot.”
Sneaking a peek on Christmas Eve,
whose that hiding under the tree?
Oh my god, we’re busted, it’s Mom and Dad,
and they’re laughing merrily..
Merry Christmas, and Happy Holiday’s To Everyone, and a Safe and Happy New Year!!
This reminded me of what my sister and I would do early Christmas morning. Great job!
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Thanks Greg, I’m one of seven kids, so you can imagine all the sneaking around we did!!
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I love the line, “Shhh, be quiet. Getting caught would cause a riot”. Good luck 🙂
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Thanks so much Christie!!
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Great story! Brought back so many memories of childhood Christmases.
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Thanks so much!! Sneaking around with my brothers and sister are some of my favorite Christmas memories.
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Hahaha — fun story. And I totally relate!
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Thanks so much Gabi!!
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Great imagery in this story!
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Thank you Linda, this was just plain fun to write.
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Ha ha, that had me busted up laughing. 🙂
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Thanks Jen and I loved your Rocking Present story, really funny idea!
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Hahahahahaha! Mom & Dad gotcha moment! Love it!
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Thanks Tracey!!
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Cute Jean, nice slinking!
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Thanks Lauri, kids do love slinking around!
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Hahaha! Delightful, Jean! I love that Mom and Dad were lying in wait – great surprise ending 🙂 And I love your refrain of voices whispering, “Shhh be quiet, getting caught would cause a riot.” – fabulous! Great job 🙂 Happy Holidays and thanks so much for joining in the contest fun!
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Thanks so much Susanna. You know you can’t fool Mom and Dad!!
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